The game is fun, but the writing is poor

I am using the first paragraph in page 228 in my classroom. Ill use it to show my students what a comma disaster looks like.

Seriously, though, the writing is quite poor at times. Nobody expects Shakespeare, but theres a couple of passages that are unacceptable.

Still, the game is fun and the story seems intriguing. Is just annoying how careless writing gets in the way.

Canovaccio about Gamebook Adventures: Infinite Universe